The night sun burns bright this evening
as it watches us dance in the rain
We pick its fruits
and share its bounty
as we embrace its cold, crystal air
It sparkles in our eyes
with every longing gaze
and fills the air
between every soft kiss
It opens up the darkness
so we can live as kings
owning the world around us
freeing us from the burdens of man
and the inhibitions of mortal life
It gives us
two hopeless lovers
a place to call our own
as the rest of the world
cools in the shroud of darkness
and slumbers the hours away
The night sun is our sun
It asks for nothing
It takes nothing
Instead offering us a place to dance
hand in hand
until the morning comes
Watching us with misty tears
that turn to dew as they touch the grass
beneath the feet of two hopeless lovers
who are finding one another
in a clearing of darkness
made by the smiling face of the nighttime sun
and owned for a moments eternity
by two lovers dancing
in the cold midnight rain
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Wow, that was so good! i read i as soon as your news letter poped up. it could not have come at a better time. And it fits my boyfriend and i so well, we love to stand in the rain at night. it feels loke that is the only time we are free of what every one has to say about how stupid and worthlees we are. so to you raven thank you your writting really do make me feel like we are not alone.
This poem was writen really well, and I loved it took me to a place where I wish I could always be
I know I don’t make it to the site too much and I told you I hate to comment and rather email you about things but I figured I’d get back out there and comment on the site. Coincidence after this passed newsletter heh? Anyway, I interpreted this poem as dusk / twilight in the rain … if that’s correct… and I couldn’t have described it any better. Oh, and by the way Raven… you lose we commented and gave it attention o:)
This is the first time I have posted a comment on your site. I have read all of your poems. They are all excellent pieces of work and this one is no exception. It somehow breaks the pattern you have been keeping..the dark, sad, and lonely mood that surrounds the rest of your poems. It is about people being happy together while your others are about being pulled apart. It is quite a contrast. I love it all the same. Very nicely done.
Beautiful…. Simply beautiful !!
Hey Raven, very good. I love reading your poems. sorry I havent been in contact lately. Miss u both,
Melisa
Wonderful!
this is a beautiful poem and i hope u continue writing throught your life
Beautiful as always. Reminds me of a place I have always longed to be. I love the ending very much.
I feel the need to congratulate you one this piece, although I rarely post comments up, firstly because of the weight you sad comment carried in this months newsletter, and secondly because honestly this poem marks a new era for you (I believe). I have been watching your career take off for a while, but this poem truly makes you a poet… I’m glad to see you’re not only writing you are learning as you go, and you’re getting better and better at it. Here’s to the contination of your progress…
Raven, this is such a beautiful poem I hope you write more soon
I love this and all of your poems that I have read. You have a great gift keep up your awsome work.
wow! your poems are so beautiful, keep writing you are very talented.
It is very true that when you find your delight in the darkness it feels as eternity . Very nice addition you have made . Thanks .
i love this poem! i used to be gothic myself and i write some pretty powerful and dark poems, but this one is far better than any i could ever write. it captures ones mind and refuses to let go until we are mystified. excellent!
Try writing shorter poems — ten to fifteen lines at most. Aim for conciseness, clarity and force.
“In limitations a master is known”
hey i really liked that poem , raven.. keep on writing!!!
im turely at a loss for words that was wonderfull to say the least my coment to the writer very well done
As always, your words captivate and entice the inner soul of all who reads.
i love the way your words touch such nerves in the soul. truely your peices are works of deeply rooted art…:)
this site kiks ass major
This is the first time that I have visited this site. I find this piece beautiful and inspiring. Thank you, the muses always be with you.
Very exquisite and uunique. A wonderful piece of poetry…
This reminds me of the love that i once knew. It’s a horrible thing to lose, an a deep thing to read about. I like it.
Today is the first time i visited this site. And just for a random bit of information, today was also the first time i got drunk. I dont know why, but one minute i was laughing, frick knows what at, probably just some random thought in my deranged head, but then the next minute, i was crying. i didnt know why at first, i didnt actually know up untill a few minutes before encountering this site or this poem. it was a good five to ten minutes before i calmed down, but i remember thinking to myself, ‘jeez, i feel better’. Oh dont worry, i was still drunk as hell, just seeing things…clearer i guess. Thats what this poem did to me when i read it.
its the best poem ive ever read and i can say, without a doubt the best poem i will ever read.
this is very pretty
your poems r so good!! if u ever stop writting i will simply die from lack of good poetry.peace.
Raven, You have done it again. I love it. I always love them.
What can I say, I am a sucker for your poetry.
i luv it keep on postin its so good this site kicks fuckin ass!!!
This is the first time that I have visited this site. I found it while surfing and asked a friend if it was a good place to read gothic poetry. Obviously, the answer was yes. I thank you for this piece. It has enlightened me in a situation of ignorance. May Serena guide you thru life…
hi
i love this poem… you’re a very good writer and all your poems are great. this is my favorite one
I loved your poem!!!! I was so deep and beautiful. Sorry I haven’t been on in a few days. I got my tonsils taken out so I have been up in bed until today. Keep me posted.
~Want2Kill~
I really liked your poem. It is deep and it makes me think about all of my past relationships. Keep me posted with your poetry.
~Dark_Angel~
You are really good and I think you express yourself in a ver deeeeeep nerturing way.You are very good at whatever it is you do,and I know you always get this sort of a response,but what would you rather get?Hate mail?
Keep em posted.
Butiful poem i am also a wandering poet so good job
simply amazing.
Hay, Love your work and would love if you can get some new stuff oyt
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that’s so beautiful … you really touch the deepest of my soul with your poems .
thanks you for these awesome poems .