Standing alone under an evening sky
watching the world spin around me
I see the faces of lost souls
dancing in the winds of change
and pouring through the sands of time
No one sees me standing there
Turning away when I don’t dance to the beat
or march to the drums of a thousand fools
They pretend I’m not there
whispering about me as if I couldn’t hear
just a piece of broken furniture
a part of the scenery
simply waiting to be thrown away
But there I stand
all alone to tomorrow
quietly challenging the song around me
by refusing to sing along
Instead watching as empty hearts walk along
looking past the invisible child
just standing there
waiting for the rain
And it’s there I’ll stand in a thousand years
long after the dance has carried the fools away
even after my body has given in to the grip of time
my place will remain unchanged
For I am the outcast
the one who refused the dance of a thousand fools
forced to suffer the wind and the rain
and stand transparent to the world around me
But the only one to remain
when the music stops and time marches on
grinding the dancers into dust
and scattering their memory to the winds of change
Though I’m left to an empty world
you’ll never see sorrow in my eyes
I’ll raise my glass with the other invisible souls
as we watch the last grains in hourglass of time
trickle through to the bottom
winding down the universe
letting us know our work is done
and that the ageless can now age no more
I dont know what your talking about hun, i love it…
oh yeah, first view first post *cheers*
You wrote what I heard
Hey! It’s a lil confusing but all together it’s a really great poem. Keep it up. Later!
I love poems that actually make you really feel something. Some kind of emotion from it that doesn’t even have anything to do with the reader, just with the poem. This was so well written, as is all the things I’ve read by you so far. This made me feel remarkably sad… whether that was intended or not, I don’t know. I refuse to conform to suit ‘their’ needs whether or not it means i have to stand alone. And so, it appears, do you.
I hardly need to tell you to keep it up.
And I’ll be there to raise a glass with you when those last few grains of time fall.
As always, I’m impressed with your work.
an artistic masterpiece
This poem I can relate to the most. This is one of my favourite ones.
like i think raven’s rants r cool, like i like gothic poetry, methophisical poetry, u get the idea, metophors, figurative words, say so much more than saying everything they way it is, it makes u think about shit???
Cheerio Raven…
I shall raise a glass with you.
Hey that was really good. It kinda shows someone’s (maybe yours) emotions, but i enjoyed it so much!!
~Keep up the excellent work, Raven!!!
Hey, your poetry, to me, seems to relate to me more and more. I love it.
Wow
Being outcast is one of these things you cant describe the feeling of it its turmoil heart wrenching, scary, full of denial and repressed aggression yet you touched on these feelings and wandered into the world of the outcast to deliver another amazing poem. Wow, keep it up!
Hi Raven, things have been pretty busy. I have a job now and even less time since I am in 2 film classes + a screenwriting class. I was able to get away to read this poem though. It didn’t grip me very tightly but the way you described an outcast is very new and original in my opinion. I haven’t seen it spelt out this way before and I like it regardless.
love the poemm i can relate bcuz i am an otcast.
Hey man that is a good poem and describes how I am sure alot of people feel alot of the time. I am one who has watched the world turn its back. It is easier for them to ignore what they dont have to look at.
I couldn’t have said it any better myself. I’ve written poetry of alienation throughout my life. I believe in Darwinism and the beatings we take that we survive will cause us to be there to raise our glasses when the apocolypse comes.
Don’t pay mind to my rants if they don’t suit you. Thanks for some hope.
They pretend I’m not there
whispering about me as if I couldn’t hear
if memory serves me well, it’s a line for one of your rant. This poem have a powerful voice.
I really must say this may be one of my favorite’s. The line “But the only one to remain
when the music stops. . .” I love this line very much and the last stanza as well. I love the way you worded things together. I only wish people could see the power of words that you have displayed more than once, so beautifully as I as the readers here do. You are a gift to the art of poetry.
As I was reading the comments, I noticed that there’s nothing I can say that hasn’t been said yet… So, I’ll just say that it’s another beautifully written poem. I can’t wait for the next…
this has a feeling of the super man..[nietzsche] it doesnt seem so sad, as objective and observing. the last stanza, is well done. i have yet to read one i dont like.
love is the law, love under will.
*arcana
OMG This poem is good. I wish I could write like that! It’s soooo awesome. I mean they way you’ve managed to hide the cliches amongst the cliches so that it ends up as a giant cliche… BRILLIANT.
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that had to be one of the best poems i have ever read. you realy have tallent! i write but i could never write something that good. it was art!
well this one is nice but i have seen better of your works. & your right this one is a tad different from what your usual thing.
Reminded me bit of a rant, however the thought very much so said.
I like this it’s just so true of history
Some people will be remembered and others will fade away but if I may ask will YOU be remembored? and, Will you hold your place in time? I no that I will not…………. And become sad with the memory of lost loves that if not 4 me would have faded away long ago.
Ravensrants poems are totally cool.
Dark and different.
But Awesome.
You right good pomes raven. Devils Child
Dark blissings
Thats a very awsome poem. Alot of people feel that way, and alot of people think others are.Its really kewl. Im glad you share ur writing with us.
nice poem. its so true
I like this poem. I have seen better of you, Raven, but this is… vaguely different, yet the same. Whatever. In any case, I shall raise my glass and laugh when the music stops. I am an
“invisible soul” as you say…
Darkest Blessings,
Ophelia
i loved ur poem….it speaks the truth… let me know when the fools stop dancing
peace:
jemral
wow…this is a really great poem. i love your work and i check the site regularly to see if you have updated. i hope that some day i will be able to write like you. keep up the good work!
Kelly
Loving it, loving it!
I like the sight, now we can see that each person has a deep and more emotional side to them, not just day to day living!!!We have so much more to discover!
my friend told me to come to this site, it’s okay and all…but i have yet to find a poem that’s truly from your heart.
…I have been here for sometime and have read many things over a few years, but I figured maybe I should speak up and alert others to my presence. This way they may have a choice on wether is matters or not, yet this aside and through life itself your viewpoint is in its own way outspoken and I know this will never be taken away but in and out of all things I must thank you for your words and the decisions you made and with those I have made choices of my own so I won’t assume anything nor judge your work. In fact I will leave with a simple smile and blessings that things may go well…I only hope the same for the rest of you
“Though I walk through the valley of Darkness I shall fear no evil….”
“My soul is touched by what you have written, it describes an unfortunate death to the spirit of youth.”
“Happiness lies so far away, lonelness a foot, madness right next door, and fear in front of you…”
Darkest Blessings…
that is a very deep poem..i can totally relate to it…i love the poem….XxJadexX
This is one of the most beautiful poems i have ever read.
this poetry really speaks to me. its deep and i love it. shows that people do kno about us invisible souls.
pure awesome no doubts
its okay and i realy do like it
its ok
killer poem! and so so true! it kinda reminds me of highschool! i was one of those people no one noticed at least not until they needed a new rumor!
this poem rocks like a dark ship over a black sea
I love the poem I can relate to it alot! keep up the good work.
Very thoughtful. You did a very nice job.
i love it. is this really how you fell. your not aone. i fell like i am the only one out there that fells that way.
Scurrying off to please and impress people who will never matter, wasting their lives trying to be someone they aren’t, a someone who is just like everyone else because Goddess forbid if they don’t fit perfectly into the cookie-cutter world we all live in. To those of us who march to the beat of our own drum, and dance to our own song, this poem is for you. Raven, you did a wonderful job.
I often stop in the middle of the mist of society wondering what they think they are. A fake misty glass cloned for my amusement . My amusement because as they laugh at me I’m laughing at them . They believe they are the better of the two kinds of people in this world . The ones who go by what others beleive is beaty,what others beleive is art, and what others believe is the right way to do anything . Then their are the ones who refuse to go into the stream going off the water fall, the ones who refuse to give into what society beleives is what we all should be . This poem captures a new light . I like it . It opens my mind to other worlds of Truth
I feel like this poem is me, where I come from I am the only one who does not march to the beat of a thousand fools, and I stand alone as a outcast.
Whithering away like a rose.
I myself am not a bitter old ladie lol, I’m not even old, but this poem describes all of my emotions perfectly.
And I feel like…i can’t desdcribe it really but…this poem is just me.
I can just relate to this poem, its hard to discribe, how I am the only one . No one seems to care for me,nor care how i am doing. they never trust me because I stand alone. No one I can truly trust nor talk to. Now I stand here left away as nothing but a lost soul.
Great poem whith a strong voice. I can really relate to your work.
i can totaly relate.that is a great poem!
This is the 1st poem I’ve read in your site, and its like every thought I’ve ever had when people exclude me or ignore me. I especially like the part about marching to the drum of a thousand fools…Whenever I go anywhere or do anything I always think about how shallow everyone is, worrying about stupid superficial things. THey matter now, but ina thousand years, people shall remember me and never know of them. When the time comes, I shall raise a glass with you Raven.
I liked your poem “Outcast” it reminds me of how I felt in grade school and am probably still going to feel in high school this year. No one understands us truly. The girls at my school call me Demon Child because they say I’m evil and weird. Its funny sometimes to sit there and watch them gabbing to each other about meaningless things like their crushes and boyfriends, they don’t know what real love is, they only know lust. They’re all meaningless little specks of dust in the universe and to make them look better they deny it themselves and give us the lable that is rightfully theirs.
from another misunderstood soul on the sidelines of what is called life.
how do u so in tuch, ure poems like relate to anyone who reads them, they are way better than mine.
☼fuzzy☼
this is a verry touching poem it explains alot of us in the world i liked it very much
i love this poem it touched in the sense that,thats how i feel,like going against the world. thank you
this is fabulous. as with alot of the comments i read it does directly relate with the reader and i can relate totally, least we can look to dance to our own beat, one created out of imagination and not following along like sheep.
fab tastic work mate
I like this poem I can relate to it cuz I am a very different kind of person
Wow!!! Great poem.
Alot of people can relate to your poetry.
It really touched my heart and soul…..
well i do really like you poem. it was very nice, youre a great writer. Ill let Andy know i visited the site after i said i wouldnt :P.
I think your poetry needs alot of work…. why dont you visit random websites… MAYBE that will help.
ok the person who last commented, your on crack. Great work Raven.
i agree with u Vinny that person is on crake anyways i love this poem it makes me feel something in side that i can’t understaind all i can say is ur a very good ….great writer and u inspire me u rock
this poem really shows how some goths and punks feel like such outsiders at school and in daily life because some people won’t approach you and this is why most have friends that are like them cause others see that we are different and they are scared this is a great poem keep it up
As i post on most of your threads, or i am begining to, excelent, altho i do not relate to this poem, seeing that I am Not the darkest person in the world, but i do understand it. But I do not understand why Alot of people who have commented on this thread have used the word “goth”, for this could go along with foolish “class clowns” and, Obese people, and ugly people, ect. Why, i do not know, i really do not care, and i just wanted to post here to notify that this does not mean just for gothic origins, but for other “New” things, as well.
hey i loved your poem it really touched me. I’m the strange girl that no one likes so I feel as if I’m the girl that dosen’t belong.
Everyone has had to feel like this at some point in their life. It was very touching, everything I’ve ever wanted to say since i was little but didn’t know how to put into words.
This poem puts into words what I’ve felt for so long. I’m the girl who sits in a corner watching the rest of the fools dance, the one whos talked about behind her back just loud enough so she can hear, the one who is friends with few and who can truly identify with even fewer. I’m the freak, the outcast, the “Creepy Goth Chick” It feels good to know I’m not alone.
this is really cool and i like it alot as i can relate finally something ive wanted to say for ages but not know how has been put into words for me. fantastic poem
I really related to the poem as well. This describes how I feel everyday at some time.You inspire me to write a poem.
your poem is great…i can relate…keep writing and ill keep reading.
I love your poems, they are quite beautiful to read. It would be a shame and a loss if you quit writing.
This is how I think I represent myself. I feel like the outcast yet I am glad I am not one of the people who are into mainstream and all the same.
It hurts to be alone but it’s better to be wise than to not be wise at all. This poem is wise. I love it.
I have read it over and over again and each time I see how true it is.
♠~ AuLani ~♠
♫♪~ John§on ~♪♫
Nice……..Geez, its been monthes since ive read that poem……My earlier Post was pretty much what i say about most of my things, but ide like to tell you, This is an excelent poem, i have wrote poems for my friends such as this one, and the exact opposite. I think you could really show you inntelligence by trying to put this into a haiku…if at all possible, it would really show people that you ARE a Prodigy.
Ther’s only one word that I can think of to describe your poetry. OUTSTANDING. I mean really fantastic. You are an excellent writer. Thnx for sharing this with everyone.
i can really relate to this one./…and it’s simply amazing…raven you have such a great way with words!!!
it is wonderfull. I know that it speaks for a lot of popole. I am new to this websight and am looking forward to reading even more of your work.
hey raven,
that is so cool!!!!yaeh but that’s how I feel. like mostly everyday. So yeah keep up the good work and don’t give up! but nice poetry though!
your #1 fan,
melissa
BKA
Gumby Blackwater
hey buddy, this poem is great, i think everyone can relate to it to some extent and it really flows smoothly…keep up the good work raven xoxo
I like it! It’s classi in a way. It’s something to really look into.
P.S I feel Public is the place this effect is at it’s strongest.
this is a poem that relates to me a lot! and ur poem is just so deep. like, the deepness that.. urgh! i can’t explain it! it’s just sooooo excellent!
truely a great acomplishmentt i must say u turned something so meak n 2 something beautiful i am so touched u turned a heartless zombie n2 a person once more
That was beautiful. You are great with words.
Every body thinks just because im 13 every thing iz. ok.But its not, never has any thing been ok.Im nothing like the other people.But in my eyes their the outcast.Its a great pome, as you can tell i can really relate 2 it.
In a word, perfect. It is strange since that seems to match my feelings and thoughts exactly, yet I could never put it into such words. It is truly one of your greater masterpieces Raven.
This Poem Resebles me how i felt thru grade skool and now during high school no one Left To Care.
i fill this way sometimes.I lie….(sighs)i fill this way all the time.
i like it
great poem for the troubled
great poem i hope when i get better at poetry, mine will be this good
That was such a good poem…..it reminds me of all the fools who get so obsesed with being “in” they forget who they are. Thx for the reminder that being me and watch all the other mindless droids is ok. You’ll be highly thought of in my eyes. Hope you come out with a book of all your poems, if there as good as this one it would be a best seller and id deffinantly buy it.
peace.
silently alone
that was awesome i really like these poems
great poem
Dearest raven i am somewhat new to this site and of the few poems i have read i can say you are a true artist and i can really relate to this poem because every person i have come in contact with has labled me an outcast because i refuse to conform to their rules i am proud to be an outcast i only hope to be as talented as you someday . thank you for your words.
this is how i feel its the best poem that can ever discibe me
excellent poem. it’s the first poem of yours that ive read and it’s my favourite, it just makes sense.
This poem makes the most sense than in thoae who have ever felt left out. Those who felt invisible like the way i am. now i know i’m not alone.
I know words are useless and trivial but i wish to express my liking of this poem. very well put. I look forward to reading more…. what a concept huh. looking forward….almost seems like blasphemy in itself
An outcast stands outside of the glass box that socity has put itself in and watches as the whole world moves, unaware of the people watching them with unwavering eyes and a wanton heart.
i loved it, it states the truth in its purity, and so many people can relate to it. especially me, keep writing!!!
Wow that is an amazing poem,, thats how I feel all the time,, especialy in school,, but WOW is all I can say!!!
that was the best poem my eyes have ever laid sight apon, ’twas amazing, brilliant and breath taking. the rebel’s code is what i call it. And i will stand by it.
AWESOME! I was sent this by a friend Jeff and to be honest i hate poetry but he said this was “HIM” so i felt obligated to read it.
I am so glad I did.
This is something i can read without hate.
all i can say is MORE OF THIS! if i had this style poetry in class to read i wouldnt have flunked english!
THANKS JEFF aka !
Brilliant a very deep poem I also can relate but with a few twists I do my own dong and see how many people eventually try to sing there own
i LOVE it.that poem hit deep.thank you and keep writing PLEASE your work is AWESOME!
Raven, this poem reminds me of me and its awesome keep up the good work your poems are so beautiful and i like them
your fan, A.J.
i love how your poems are expressed through metaphors and telling them like a story. this poem has a dark edge to it, but it also has a positive feel to it near the end. i thought it was very interesting, great work!
“If you’re going my way … I’ll walk with you.”
As always, beautifully written, beautifully imagined.
I love your words.
truely amazing i love it
Wow. I love this poem! Your such I great writer! I can only hope that one day I will have pratciced enough to be as good as you! I love how all of your poems are like storys. I know that was already said, but, I agree, its very interesting, and it works.
i think this is a real good one somthing i feel and can relate to i feel the same as the poem discribes
is seems that u wrote that just for me and my group of freinds cause thats all we feel at school other than ridicul and bitterness
This peom is my favorite. this is my life. I am an Outcast and will forever be that way.
This is a very unique poem!I love it!I know it seems as though everyone has said this but I feel you’ve wrote this poem about my life.Ever since I was little I’ve been an outcast.Well anyway you are a great writer and I can only hope that I become half as good as you.
With Love
Adrianna
hey thats was deep i felt wat you felt i felt and see the sam thing as i read it
This poem is me… its everything i stand for and everything i hate in this world… i love it
i really love this poems..it is just like me
God gave you a lot of talent
I think it is the best poem in the world
This is probably the best poem I have ever read. When I read it, it remined me what it is like tobe an outcast in high school. I wish that i could write poetry the way you do
i think the poem was very inspiring to i think it was very related to my life and how i feel about my life and people around me what they think about me. my dad thinks i am full of hateand he thinks i am an outcast
This is me.
this is a great work raven.i see that you feel alone, as i have felt, and fell now.you know its not wrong. you are happy to stand in your place, you atnd there through the knowledge that the masses aren’t always right, and decisions are yours to make.none of us can choose this life of being alone, but we are who we are, that alone should empower us to stand our gound, albeit, alone.
This is a very lovely poem and I hope to read the rest of your poems as soon as I can…
You remind of myself.
Wow, over a year since ive been to your site. October 22nd, 2005 was last time. I see you have added more. I am now off to read those, and to read ur diary.
This is the best poem in the world, it describes my best friend.
Now this is one poem that I definately relate to. Good job.
Amazing. Just like my poems only longer.
I loved the poem it was depressing and I love depressing and it made pefect sense I loved it
This is my favorite poem in the world. It sort of relates to me. When I’m by myself, no one talks to me or acknowelages my existance. No one likes me, excluding my small circle of friends…7 exactly. You are THE BEST poem writer ever!
Oh yeah I alsmost forgot…I put some of these poems on my site and I’ll tell people to come here to read more….is that ok????ummmm….bye!
That reminds me of me…
Here I am at age 50 and having just read your poem for the very first time, it truly hit home! I have been an outcast in my family, my entire life. I accept it now. Your poem expresses all my thoughts, fears and emotions. Thank you. Well written.
I feel like that a lot lately- maybe everyone does
i hate this this stinks, i like deap but this is horible god, well you tried
i really enjoyed reading this…it is a good poem and it is very heartfelt or so it seems. i enjoy when others feel so strongly about how they live and thier life unlike all these sad posers out here you know….great poem and so on so forth
ever feel like ure the oucast and ure looking in from everyone this is in so much detail but i really think there could be more!!!!!!
love it