Standing alone under an evening sky
watching the world spin around me
I see the faces of lost souls
dancing in the winds of change
and pouring through the sands of time
No one sees me standing there
Turning away when I don't dance to the beat
or march to the drums of a thousand fools
They pretend I'm not there
whispering about me as if I couldn't hear
just a piece of broken furniture
a part of the scenery
simply waiting to be thrown away
But there I stand
all alone to tomorrow
quietly challenging the song around me
by refusing to sing along
Instead watching as empty hearts walk along
looking past the invisible child
just standing there
waiting for the rain
And it's there I'll stand in a thousand years
long after the dance has carried the fools away
even after my body has given in to the grip of time
my place will remain unchanged
For I am the outcast
the one who refused the dance of a thousand fools
forced to suffer the wind and the rain
and stand transparent to the world around me
But the only one to remain
when the music stops and time marches on
grinding the dancers into dust
and scattering their memory to the winds of change
Though I'm left to an empty world
you'll never see sorrow in my eyes
I'll raise my glass with the other invisible souls
as we watch the last grains in hourglass of time
trickle through to the bottom
winding down the universe
letting us know our work is done
and that the ageless can now age no more
I feel like this poem is me, where I come from I am the only one who does not march to the beat of a thousand fools, and I stand alone as a outcast.
Whithering away like a rose.
I myself am not a bitter old ladie lol, I'm not even old, but this poem describes all of my emotions perfectly.
And I feel like…i can't desdcribe it really but…this poem is just me.
I can just relate to this poem, its hard to discribe, how I am the only one . No one seems to care for me,nor care how i am doing. they never trust me because I stand alone. No one I can truly trust nor talk to. Now I stand here left away as nothing but a lost soul.
Great poem whith a strong voice. I can really relate to your work.
i can totaly relate.that is a great poem!
This is the 1st poem I've read in your site, and its like every thought I've ever had when people exclude me or ignore me. I especially like the part about marching to the drum of a thousand fools…Whenever I go anywhere or do anything I always think about how shallow everyone is, worrying about stupid superficial things. THey matter now, but ina thousand years, people shall remember me and never know of them. When the time comes, I shall raise a glass with you Raven.
I liked your poem "Outcast" it reminds me of how I felt in grade school and am probably still going to feel in high school this year. No one understands us truly. The girls at my school call me Demon Child because they say I'm evil and weird. Its funny sometimes to sit there and watch them gabbing to each other about meaningless things like their crushes and boyfriends, they don't know what real love is, they only know lust. They're all meaningless little specks of dust in the universe and to make them look better they deny it themselves and give us the lable that is rightfully theirs.
from another misunderstood soul on the sidelines of what is called life.
how do u so in tuch, ure poems like relate to anyone who reads them, they are way better than mine.
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this is a verry touching poem it explains alot of us in the world i liked it very much
i love this poem it touched in the sense that,thats how i feel,like going against the world. thank you
this is fabulous. as with alot of the comments i read it does directly relate with the reader and i can relate totally, least we can look to dance to our own beat, one created out of imagination and not following along like sheep.
fab tastic work mate 🙂
I like this poem I can relate to it cuz I am a very different kind of person
Wow!!! Great poem.
Alot of people can relate to your poetry.
It really touched my heart and soul…..
well i do really like you poem. it was very nice, youre a great writer. Ill let Andy know i visited the site after i said i wouldnt :P.
I think your poetry needs alot of work…. why dont you visit random websites… MAYBE that will help.
ok the person who last commented, your on crack. Great work Raven.
i agree with u Vinny that person is on crake anyways i love this poem it makes me feel something in side that i can't understaind all i can say is ur a very good ….great writer and u inspire me u rock
this poem really shows how some goths and punks feel like such outsiders at school and in daily life because some people won't approach you and this is why most have friends that are like them cause others see that we are different and they are scared this is a great poem keep it up 😉
As i post on most of your threads, or i am begining to, excelent, altho i do not relate to this poem, seeing that I am Not the darkest person in the world, but i do understand it. But I do not understand why Alot of people who have commented on this thread have used the word "goth", for this could go along with foolish "class clowns" and, Obese people, and ugly people, ect. Why, i do not know, i really do not care, and i just wanted to post here to notify that this does not mean just for gothic origins, but for other "New" things, as well.
hey i loved your poem it really touched me. I'm the strange girl that no one likes so I feel as if I'm the girl that dosen't belong.
Everyone has had to feel like this at some point in their life. It was very touching, everything I've ever wanted to say since i was little but didn't know how to put into words.
This poem puts into words what I've felt for so long. I'm the girl who sits in a corner watching the rest of the fools dance, the one whos talked about behind her back just loud enough so she can hear, the one who is friends with few and who can truly identify with even fewer. I'm the freak, the outcast, the "Creepy Goth Chick" It feels good to know I'm not alone.
this is really cool and i like it alot as i can relate finally something ive wanted to say for ages but not know how has been put into words for me. fantastic poem
I really related to the poem as well. This describes how I feel everyday at some time.You inspire me to write a poem.
your poem is great…i can relate…keep writing and ill keep reading.
I love your poems, they are quite beautiful to read. It would be a shame and a loss if you quit writing.
This is how I think I represent myself. I feel like the outcast yet I am glad I am not one of the people who are into mainstream and all the same.
It hurts to be alone but it's better to be wise than to not be wise at all. This poem is wise. I love it.
I have read it over and over again and each time I see how true it is.
♠~ AuLani ~♠
♫♪~ John§on ~♪♫
Nice……..Geez, its been monthes since ive read that poem……My earlier Post was pretty much what i say about most of my things, but ide like to tell you, This is an excelent poem, i have wrote poems for my friends such as this one, and the exact opposite. I think you could really show you inntelligence by trying to put this into a haiku…if at all possible, it would really show people that you ARE a Prodigy.
Ther's only one word that I can think of to describe your poetry. OUTSTANDING. I mean really fantastic. You are an excellent writer. Thnx for sharing this with everyone.
i can really relate to this one./…and it's simply amazing…raven you have such a great way with words!!!
it is wonderfull. I know that it speaks for a lot of popole. I am new to this websight and am looking forward to reading even more of your work.
hey raven,
that is so cool!!!!yaeh but that's how I feel. like mostly everyday. So yeah keep up the good work and don't give up! but nice poetry though!
your #1 fan,
melissa
BKA
Gumby Blackwater
hey buddy, this poem is great, i think everyone can relate to it to some extent and it really flows smoothly…keep up the good work raven xoxo
I like it! It's classi in a way. It's something to really look into.
P.S I feel Public is the place this effect is at it's strongest.
this is a poem that relates to me a lot! and ur poem is just so deep. like, the deepness that.. urgh! i can't explain it! it's just sooooo excellent!
truely a great acomplishmentt i must say u turned something so meak n 2 something beautiful i am so touched u turned a heartless zombie n2 a person once more
That was beautiful. You are great with words.
Every body thinks just because im 13 every thing iz. ok.But its not, never has any thing been ok.Im nothing like the other people.But in my eyes their the outcast.Its a great pome, as you can tell i can really relate 2 it.
In a word, perfect. It is strange since that seems to match my feelings and thoughts exactly, yet I could never put it into such words. It is truly one of your greater masterpieces Raven.
This Poem Resebles me how i felt thru grade skool and now during high school no one Left To Care.
i fill this way sometimes.I lie….(sighs)i fill this way all the time.
i like it
great poem for the troubled
great poem i hope when i get better at poetry, mine will be this good
That was such a good poem…..it reminds me of all the fools who get so obsesed with being "in" they forget who they are. Thx for the reminder that being me and watch all the other mindless droids is ok. You'll be highly thought of in my eyes. Hope you come out with a book of all your poems, if there as good as this one it would be a best seller and id deffinantly buy it.
peace.
silently alone
that was awesome i really like these poems
great poem
Dearest raven i am somewhat new to this site and of the few poems i have read i can say you are a true artist and i can really relate to this poem because every person i have come in contact with has labled me an outcast because i refuse to conform to their rules i am proud to be an outcast i only hope to be as talented as you someday . thank you for your words.
this is how i feel its the best poem that can ever discibe me
excellent poem. it's the first poem of yours that ive read and it's my favourite, it just makes sense.