Comments on: Runaway: Part Eleven

By: ALysa

ALysa — Sat, 22 Nov 2003 08:31:17 +0000

I would like to know more asap!!!! please respond to this its quite interesting

By: Tommy

Tommy — Thu, 13 Nov 2003 11:36:13 +0000

It's been unreal so far but this chatper was not as good. This guys had it pretty bad, one comment though. It's starting to drag abit. I just read the whole thing through, and it's one bad thing after another. It needs a new spark, but otherwise keep up the good work, look forward to the next addition. -Tommy-

By: Andrew

Andrew — Thu, 13 Nov 2003 02:24:05 +0000

Hmmmm, he's got 750 thousand dollars in drug money, a big shot drug dealer looking for payment, a wife that's probably got the police hunting for him and a violent latino gang out for revenge… This is when the comic relief steps in and says, "well it can't get any WORSE can it?" Very well told all in all. I do have one gripe though. Jake's escape from the building was a little iffy. I had a hard time suspending disbelief when no one stopped him or even noticed his exit. Other than that, I enjoyed this chapter very much.

By: Hugh

Hugh — Thu, 13 Nov 2003 02:06:12 +0000

Darn good one but not as good as the last but hey there are always not so good chapters in a book

By: blackcatgirl

blackcatgirl — Wed, 12 Nov 2003 16:14:28 +0000

lol youre sending this guy close to my area, i'm starting to worry :-p
j/k