Comments on: The Warlock and the Pupil

By: Giovanni Garcia

Giovanni Garcia — Sat, 09 Jul 2005 23:52:03 +0000

It was an alright story. However, that short was inadequate on elaboration. Keep on trying….

By: Devils child

Devils child — Wed, 13 Apr 2005 18:21:00 +0000

That was a cool story and you sould have explaned the worlock more then you did but i liked that story keep wrighting things.
Dark blissings

By: Britt

Britt — Thu, 10 Jun 2004 22:13:36 +0000

This was the third story that I had read and I wnjoyed reading it. It had a great moral as you would say and I liked how the main point was the guy trying to figure things out mostly for himself. Given some good advice from the warlock. And I like how the story was not stuck on just the warlock but we could of used a little more info. about him.

By: Bran.

Bran. — Wed, 17 Mar 2004 05:46:22 +0000

This was the very first story I’ve ever read when I first stumbled onto your site so many years ago. At the time, I was in a huge puzzle about curses and supersitions concerning those curses. Your story at least helped me get out of that maze, and I fell in love… With how you wrote in such simple, clear sentences to convey a deeper meaning if one knew how to read between the lines in such stories. The point is … I still fell in love and am a Warlock fan!

By: Cloud_9

Cloud_9 — Thu, 19 Feb 2004 04:07:53 +0000

This story was very difficult for me to grasp. First of all, I wanted to know more about this warlock, I had a hard time understanding that the speaker learned all about black magic (so much infact that he was able to practice it himself) in as little as what seemed like one conversation and also that the warlock was so willing to speak about it. I DID like the “moral” as you may call it, that you shouldn’t cast curses that are unjust and doing so protects it from coming back on you. But then the story just veers off in college somewhere and you really get pulled from the warlock thing. It all just happens way to quickly and maybe if you would have given more imagery and sensory details to make things more real and “in your face” it would have held more of an interest. The sequence of the events also seemed to cause a problem for this story. Please take no offense to this but if i might suggest a different sequence for the story it would be to start right from the beginning of the main characters engagement and introduce the pesky pain in the butt girl. Then maybe the warlock could have been his room mate and he could ask for help from him. Also, I wanted to know WHAT things the girl was doing that was being a bother to him and his fiance. This story really has the potential to be very good not that it isnt already a very good idea. I just think you needed to put more time in it and extend it. The main conflict in the story was unclear too. I know that it was the pesky chick but that conflict was resolved so easily and with very few complications. Dialogue is always a plus and this story really benefit from some more. Keep writing!